作文赏析：
假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。
注意：词数不少于60
提示词：郊区 suburbs
1. 一档:
April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering them. After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.
2. 点评: 覆盖了所有内容要点，有细节描述，句式和词汇较丰富，所写内容连贯，结构清晰，体现较强的语言运用能力。 17-18分
Green Action in Our Class
I am Li Hua from Class 1 Senior 3 in HongXing middle school. On April 12th our
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class organized an activity to plant trees in suburbs to make our country more beautiful.
Early in the morning on April 12th, my classmates and I went to the suburbs by bicycle. And there was an awful lot of breath-taking scenery on our way there which could be just appreciated in rural areas, saying, green mountains, golden wheat field and so on, which brought us great joys.
When we got there, we went into working at once. Some of us dug holes to plant trees and some of us took the little trees to the holes. What’s more, there were also some careful girls watering the trees which were just planted. Thanks to our great efforts, all the trees were soon planted and two of our classmates even put up a board reading “love and protect the trees” in front of the little forest made by us. After all the hard work, we also took photos of our whole class with tools in our hand in front of the trees.
Exhausted but happy, we had a significant day and I hope our country will be more beautiful because of the decorating of trees!
3. 点评: 基本覆盖了全部内容要点，细节描写不够充分，基本完成规定的写作任务。
I’m Li a student of In order to respond to the to go to suburbs to plant trees on April, 12th. Early in the morning, we went to the destination by bike. There are many trees and rice by the side of the road. On our way to there, we enjoyed the beautiful view and talked happily. As soon as we got there, we began to work. Some of us dug, somerest took the trees to places where need them. After planting trees, we chose an obvious place to make a sign read “ Protect ” stand to prevent people from cutting trees. At last, we took qualification deed.
4. 点评: 要点描述不充分；尤其是第二幅图没有展开；所用
句式和词汇有Hong Xing middle school had an activity to make the country green than before on April 12nd. Class one three students made the action in suburbs. First of all, they met at country road in the morning and went to the suburbs by bike. After arrived at the suburbs they the tree and watered the tree. While they finished planting, they made a sign beside the trees. The words in the sign are protect the trees. Finally they took some photos and back to the home.
What a meaningful day!
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请把周末作业试卷上的作文写在下边：先完成表格，再完成作文。
写作重点：
1、要点（细节）
2、逻辑（连接词、过渡句）
3、时态、人称
4、开头、结尾
5、卷面和书写
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作文赏析：
假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。
注意：词数不少于60
提示词：郊区 suburbs
1. 一档:
April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering them. After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.
2. 点评: 覆盖了所有内容要点，有细节描述，句式和词汇较丰富，所写内容连贯，结构清晰，体现较强的语言运用能力。 17-18分
Green Action in Our Class
I am Li Hua from Class 1 Senior 3 in HongXing middle school. On April 12th our
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class organized an activity to plant trees in suburbs to make our country more beautiful.
Early in the morning on April 12th, my classmates and I went to the suburbs by bicycle. And there was an awful lot of breath-taking scenery on our way there which could be just appreciated in rural areas, saying, green mountains, golden wheat field and so on, which brought us great joys.
When we got there, we went into working at once. Some of us dug holes to plant trees and some of us took the little trees to the holes. What’s more, there were also some careful girls watering the trees which were just planted. Thanks to our great efforts, all the trees were soon planted and two of our classmates even put up a board reading “love and protect the trees” in front of the little forest made by us. After all the hard work, we also took photos of our whole class with tools in our hand in front of the trees.
Exhausted but happy, we had a significant day and I hope our country will be more beautiful because of the decorating of trees!
3. 点评: 基本覆盖了全部内容要点，细节描写不够充分，基本完成规定的写作任务。
I’m Li a student of In order to respond to the to go to suburbs to plant trees on April, 12th. Early in the morning, we went to the destination by bike. There are many trees and rice by the side of the road. On our way to there, we enjoyed the beautiful view and talked happily. As soon as we got there, we began to work. Some of us dug, somerest took the trees to places where need them. After planting trees, we chose an obvious place to make a sign read “ Protect ” stand to prevent people from cutting trees. At last, we took qualification deed.
4. 点评: 要点描述不充分；尤其是第二幅图没有展开；所用
句式和词汇有Hong Xing middle school had an activity to make the country green than before on April 12nd. Class one three students made the action in suburbs. First of all, they met at country road in the morning and went to the suburbs by bike. After arrived at the suburbs they the tree and watered the tree. While they finished planting, they made a sign beside the trees. The words in the sign are protect the trees. Finally they took some photos and back to the home.
What a meaningful day!
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请把周末作业试卷上的作文写在下边：先完成表格，再完成作文。
写作重点：
1、要点（细节）
2、逻辑（连接词、过渡句）
3、时态、人称
4、开头、结尾
5、卷面和书写
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